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HavkinKnight
10-18-2010, 04:14 PM
F.I.N.E.
“Feelings inside not expressed”

I'm not gonna change a single thing I'm doing
and I don't need your approval
and I ain't ask if I'm staying on task
doing these things the way they're supposed to be done
like in the past
there's no need for suspense
keep your two cents
matter fact I'll give you back everything that you lack
you've got a thing for stabbing me in the back
I gave you everything I had on the track
I gave you two years I'll never get back
call this a fact
I got beat by your ways
so I picked up an axe and hacked
every tie that we had
then took a bat to the telephone jack
communications now a thing of the past
I poured kerosene on all that we had
then lit a match, stood back
and let the fire turn the walls to wax
this ain't a game - this is my plan of attack
I'm leaving you and I'll never be back
I hope this words makes the memories stack

I'll admit - I was caught in the mix
knee deep in your games
addicted to your love
boy I loved me some pain
you took my dreams and you held me back
that little bit of innocence i had now i've gotta say I grew up fast
you're nothing but trash
I hope you burn and they loose your ashes
and you're forgotten
i hope your history never remembers what you brought it
you're a thief and you lie
you had me hooked on your high
i thought i was fine - blind in both eyes
you made me think i could fly
before I knew it i forgot what the sky even looked like
you're sick - you're wicked
habits you slip quick
harder to quit
you take a little bit of truth and give it a twist
it seems so right in the moment
so it's hard to resist
but then you hit in the face with a brick
where did I trip? What did I miss?
to unaccountable memories - I dedicate this...

Imp3nded
10-18-2010, 04:51 PM
Very nice.

You have a typo in the third to last line. I'm guessing 'they' should be 'then'.

MS eMeRaLd
10-18-2010, 07:10 PM
i liked it. very good

SullyVan
10-19-2010, 12:13 AM
good job:)

KRILLIN
01-13-2011, 09:02 PM
Inspiring. I used to write stuff like this a LONG time ago. Maybe I should start again.

Gearijigu
02-24-2011, 03:16 PM
nice... great post

RagingChickens
02-26-2011, 10:47 AM
Wow man that was awesome. Really inspirational :) Great rhyming too.

xMortyZx
04-05-2011, 12:04 PM
I wonder if Havkin excelled in his Honor's English classes?!?! You realize this sounds very "Thoreau." Is he a favorite poet of yours?

HavkinKnight
04-05-2011, 01:27 PM
I wonder if Havkin excelled in his Honor's English classes?!?! You realize this sounds very "Thoreau." Is he a favorite poet of yours?

im an writer lol i loved English (creative writing) altho my spelling is REALLY BAD!

Gruntly
04-08-2011, 12:46 PM
Really intense, I liked it. Reminds me of Odd Future (Band). You should add some more writings on here.

xMortyZx
04-17-2011, 02:48 AM
im an writer lol i loved English (creative writing) altho my spelling is REALLY BAD!

ummm i'm "a" writer. Only use "an" before words that begin with a vowel sound (even if spelled with an initial consonant, as in an hour), and a before words that begin with a consonant sound (even if spelled with a vowel, as in a European).
Now I'm just being a smart ass!!! H2DF!!! Shit havkin, did I get that right? :)

HavkinKnight
04-17-2011, 10:59 AM
ummm i'm "a" writer. Only use "an" before words that begin with a vowel sound (even if spelled with an initial consonant, as in an hour), and a before words that begin with a consonant sound (even if spelled with a vowel, as in a European).
Now I'm just being a smart ass!!! H2DF!!! Shit havkin, did I get that right? :)

no one said my Grammar was better! lol